高考英語滿分點評作文:給動物園工作人員的一封信
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【試題】假定你是李華,從小喜愛大熊貓(panda),一直通過有關(guān)網(wǎng)站(website)關(guān)注三年前在美國圣迭哥動物園出生的大熊貓“蘇琳”和她的母親“白云”?,F(xiàn)在蘇琳即將三歲。請根據(jù)以下要點給動物園工作人員寫一封信:
1、 自我介紹; 2、祝賀蘇琳生日; 3、感謝工作人員; 4、索取蘇琳三歲生日照。
注意:1、詞數(shù)100左右;2、可以適當增加細節(jié),以使行文連貫;3、開頭語已為你寫好。
例文:
Dear Sir/Madam,
Greetings from China!
I’m Li Hua, a student in Sichuan. I’ve been a panda lover since I was a child. About three years ago I was delighted to learn that Baiyun gave birth to her daughter Sulin and I’ve been watching her grow on your website,. Now she’s going to be three. I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
By the way, could I have a photo of Sulin taken on her third birthday? Thank you very much in advance.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
【名師點評】本文寫作的內(nèi)容要點如下:
1.自我介紹;2.信息來源;3.祝賀生日;4.感謝照顧;5.索取照片;6.合適的結(jié)尾。
這封信格式正確,行文規(guī)范,描述有條不紊,稱呼、正文中的開頭及結(jié)尾、結(jié)束語均表達到位。文章行文活潑,感情真摯,語言表述準確,洋溢著作者因大熊貓得到精心照顧而對美方人員的感激之情,以及希望自己愿望成真,得到照片的希冀之情。長短句運用合理,結(jié)合了簡單句和復合句,流暢自然,不露痕跡,的確是一篇佳作。
積累卡片英漢互譯
好詞1.delighted adj.欣喜的,快樂的2.express v.表達 3.give birth to v.產(chǎn)生,生育
好句I’d like to wish her a happy birthday and to express my thanks to you for your hard work, because of which Sulin and her parents are living a happy and healthy life in the US.
我祝福它生日快樂并且對你們的辛勤工作表達我的感激之情,正是你們的努力工作讓蘇琳和它的父母在美國過著幸福和健康的生活。
評析:定語從句的使用。